Safe

view-from-the-planeHe woke up drenched in sweat. But that was common these days. It had been a long time since he’d slept undisturbed and peaceful. The last was when she had slept beside him. Now, when he shut his eyes, horrifying scenes of battle played constantly – Blood. Death. Destruction. He was near breaking point, and waking up everyday with fear as his constant companion wasn’t helping. He was almost glad when he was shot and the doctors said he was unfit to go back to fight.

He turned, looking out. He was going home. With her, he would finally be safe.

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Written for Friday Fictioneers and you can check out the other contributions here.

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43 comments on “Safe

  1. Preeti, Welcome to Friday Fictioneers! Good story and well written. I’m sure many soldiers feel that way as long as they know they’ll heal and be well again. Well done. 🙂 —Susan

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  2. draliman says:

    I imagine many soldiers have felt the same (as long as the injury wasn’t too bad). Great story!

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  3. Blake says:

    I liked how you contrasted the character’s experience of war with the simple humanity of the feeling of safety: “when she had slept beside him.” Very effective.

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  4. subroto says:

    Hopefully he will leave it all behind. Welcome to the Friday Fictioneers.

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  5. yarnspinnerr says:

    Welcome to FF.

    good take on the prompt. Well done.

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  6. Horus says:

    Welcome to merry band of Friday Fictioneers !

    Nice story here 🙂

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  7. Lovely last line after a story fraught with anxiety.

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  8. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Preeti, Welcome to Friday Fictioneers! Your story is very good and I look forward to reading more from you in the future! Love your story – Nan 🙂

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  9. Quite ambiguous but I like the soldier travelling home concept. Good story.

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  10. A powerful story weaved and bring alive human emotions:)

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  11. Amy Reese says:

    What a great perspective you share with your story. I can imagine the relief a soldier must feel at the thought of going home, even if it’s with an injury. Great story.

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  12. ahtdoucette says:

    Hi Preeti. This was a really good take on emotional fall-out and bittersweet memories. Hope he finds his peace at home.

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  13. shanx says:

    Beautiful! Very well portrayed what it is to soldiers when they shut their eyes. Read this at a blog- “War is what happens when language fails” this sticks with me.

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  14. The soldier wishes to be back home and where his heart belonged. Wars/battles are futile and there are no winners.

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  15. Sun says:

    you captured the horrible side of violence well, Preeti. may your character find peace and healing soon. welcome to FF! 🙂

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  16. kentuckygal50 says:

    Wonderful story. Shows how important it is for a soldier to have an ‘anchor’ back home.

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  17. menons129 says:

    A nice beginning ! A happy news for both.

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  18. Anmol Rawat says:

    Good one 🙂
    Finally a safe and happy destination for the war hero!

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  19. Dear Preeti,
    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

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  20. dmmacilroy says:

    Welcome to the party, pal. A great story is a good beginning.
    Aloha,
    Doug

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